For the last several months I've been working on a book, To Love Honor and Obey. I decided that I was going to write a book and submit it for publishing. Now I've decided maybe that isn't such a good idea... I participated in one Saturday Spankings Hop. Overall I actually got good feedback. Even some helpful feedback such as not using Jordan and Lilly as the names of the characters (even though the book is based on "our" story) it is not entirely accurate and using our names complicates things. So now the names are Hilton and Savannah. I've grown to like them :) The problem is.. I am no English major. I'm having some issues with "Tense" and dialogue. I'm also feeling so inferior after visiting so many authors and really paying attention to the way they write and not necessarily the story itself. So, I've kinda put the book on the back burner.
Today I was writing a post for the blog about a recent trip off the right track that I had and it quickly turned into a story. Over three pages in fact. So my question for you guys is.... To Write or Not to Write?
I'm going to post the story I wrote today. It is about Jordan and I. I wrote it from his point of view. If you have the time... read it. Offer constructive criticism if you have some. But most of all let me know if this kind of thing is something you would like to read. Because, this is how I write. Thanks to all of you in advance:) Warning it does contain explicit sexual content. If that offends you please stop reading now.
Lilly De-rails
Somehow things had gotten off track. Lilly’s submissiveness
and respect were sorely lacking. I
wasn’t sure exactly what had happened to cause her derailing but I knew that I
had to get Lilly back on board.
I knew she was a little stressed, back to school week was
always hard for her. She hated to let the kids go. I was sure not feeling well
for a couple of days didn’t help the situation either but regardless, there was
no excuse for Lilly’s sass and disrespectfulness.
I tried to be the nice guy and give warnings. First the
stern look. Then the comment “Twister?” followed by “Your on thin ice Lillyanna
Rose…” and even a pulled pony tail with
a few firm swats to her clothed bottom in the kitchen after a particularly
sarcastic remark. Nothing had worked. I knew what I needed to do but I really
didn’t want to do it.
Lilly’s last punishment spanking had resulted in a purple
bruised sore bottom. It hadn’t been my intention to mark her that way but when
she refused to submit she earned double the strikes I had planned. Twenty
strikes with the twister was an obscene number. It had started out at ten. It
was a similar situation to this actually. Lilly had simply gotten off
track. A firm spanking always did the
trick so I decided 10 whacks were sufficient to rectify the situation. But when
the time to spank came… Lilly refused to get into position, earning herself five
additional strikes. The threat of the additional strikes still didn’t convince
her to move so again I warned her if I had to physically put her in position I
would add an additional 5 strikes. Lilly
didn’t budge so I physically positioned her and she resisted the entire time.
True to my word I brought the wand down twenty times, making her count each
one, from mid bottom to the top of her thighs. We got through it but it was not
something I ever wanted to have to repeat. Actually since I saw the bruising I
had been reluctant to spank again. I had let things slide for far too long now
though and Lilly was quickly slipping
out of my control.
I knew Lilly should have learned her lesson the last time
and this time when I scolded her and ordered her to get into position she
should quickly comply to avoid additional strikes. But… I know Lilly… I would
tell her to bend over the side of the bed and she would stand there and look at
me pleading with her big blue eyes for me not to follow through and punish her.
She would stand there until the stakes were raised so high she had to move and
the spanking would become much more intense than I intended it to be.
I thought about it all day. I wanted to do something
different this time. I didn’t want to give her the chance to disobey me and I
came up with a plan.
That night, like every night, Lilly put the kids to bed and
then met me in the bedroom. She found me sitting on the edge of the bed which
is not unusual. I opened my knees and held out my arms to her indicating I
wanted her to come to the edge of the bed and stand between my knees for a hug.
We did this often. I would hold Lilly tight and she would rub my neck and back.
It was a safe move for her so I knew she would comply.
As usual I hugged Lilly and she began rubbing. I started
talking to her about her attitude. “Lilly, I don’t know what has gotten into
you. You are not the boss around here! I am and I will not tolerate your
disrespect…” She stiffened a bit but continued massaging and I let my hands
fall to her bottom and caressed gently as I lectured. “I don’t want to have to
punish you but you aren’t giving me a choice,” I continued. “I’ve given you
several warnings over the past few days and you have ignored them,” I said
tightening my legs so she was trapped between my knees exactly where I wanted
her. Now she did not have the chance to disobey. “Now you’re going to get your
bare bottom spanked.” I lowered her pajama pants and panties as I spoke and
turned her to the side. “Please don’t do this Jordan. I promise I will be
good!” she begged as I guided her over my knee.
Her upper body rested
on the bed and I positioned her bottom high on my lap. I gently rubbed her
cheeks helping her to unclench them and relax. “Be a good girl Lilly, you know
you need this,” I whispered. As her cheeks softened I eased her thighs open a
bit to improve my view of her pussy. My hand wandered lower between her legs
and as expected her lips were wet. I rubbed the full length of her slit and she
moaned.
I began spanking with my hand steadily increasing the
strength of each strike. As I spanked harder Lilly began to squirm and try to
protect her bottom. I landed some harsh swats to her thighs trying to cure the
problem. “This is just your warm up Lillyanna Rose. You lay there and take your
spanking like a big girl and you will be rewarded continue resisting and you
will be punished more,” I instructed.
Being the stubborn brat Lilly can be she continued fighting.
Little did she know I had stashed some things right beside me under my pillow.
“You were warned!” I said and I poured some lube down her
crack. “No Jordan! Please don’t. Not that!!!,” she cried clenching her cheeks
tight. Yes this I said rubbing my finger down her lubed slit. “If you continue
resisting I will use this,” I said showing her the new large plug that I
recently purchased. Lilly gasped and her cheeks relaxed allowing me to gently
probe her puckered hole. Sufficiently relaxed I teased her pussy with our small
plug fucking her in and out before moving the plug to her bottom and inserting
it.
I continued hand spanking her now plugged ass and Lilly
remained still. No squirming or guarding. My large plug threat was effective.
Sufficiently warmed up I retrieved the leather paddle and conducted the
punishment part of the spanking. When Lilly bottom was evenly reddened, I gave
each of her sit spots a rapid 10 whacks. I wanted her to feel the spanking when
she sat down for the next several days. Having a sore bottom kept her
respectful and submissive which is exactly what I wanted.
Lilly had tolerated the remainder of the spanking very well.
She had attempted very little movement and her attempt at guarding her bottom
form the paddle had resulted in having her bottom fucked by the plug. No
further guarding occurred after that.
The spanking was over and I caressed Lilly hot cheeks and
dipped down to her pussy. She was dripping wet and my finger slipped gently
inside. Sex wasn’t usually a part of our punishments but hey, rules are made to
be broken. After all Lilly had been a pretty good girl and taken her spanking
well so she deserved a reward.
I stood her up. “Bend over the pillows,” I commanded. Lilly
eagerly complied. There she was bottom thrust up, legs spread, pink plug
peeking out from between her bright red spanked cheeks and a glistening wet
swollen pussy. I had to fuck her.
